So, I originally posted this in the
Book Reviews and Discussion thread, but got little advice because few people seem to read it, so I'm posting this in the
Forum Community board where I hope I'll get more feedback.
So, four months ago, I started drafting a novel. This was my second attempt at writing it since over a year ago, when I abandoned an older project because, simply, I did not like what was being produced. Since I started the new novel, I've tried to work on it a little each day to brush up on my skills and get critique. In fact, I have decided not to put the book up for sale when it is finished as a way to encourage people to read it and send me their thoughts and criticisms, which I feel will benefit me more over the long term.
Now, my high school's literature magazine is looking for poems, short stories, and other written works to publish. I thought this would be a good opportunity for me to publish what I believe to be my best work and promote the novel so that I have an audience to show when it's released. Unfortunately, my friends on Facebook have given me little feedback here.
Though it is short, this chapter was written, re-written, and edited over several hours. However, I am still not completely satisfied with it. So, I thought I would post the excerpt here for public scrutiny so that I can make the necessary changes before I submit it to the magazine, hopefully by the end of this week.
Thanks.
http://www.scribd.com/doc/133729575/The-Sunset-An-Excerpt