Could you help me again correct my wrting mistakes?

[v0031]

Mary is an athletic girl, but she is near-sighted. She wants to wear contact lenses. She thinks it makes her more beautiful and confident. And it’s easy to do sports when she wears contact lenses. But her parents don’t think so. They think the contact lenses cost too much money. It’s uncomfortable to wear them. And it takes a lot of time to clean them.
In my opinion, Mary should choose to wear a pair of glasses instead of contact lenses. In this way, she can protect her eyes and save money for her parents.

[RaphaelDLG]

Mary is an athletic girl, but she is near-sighted. She wants to wear contact lenses. She thinks it they makes her more beautiful and confident. And it’s easy to doplay sports when she wears contact lenses. But her parents don’t think so. They think the contacts cost too much money, that it’s uncomfortable to wear them, and that it takes a lot of time to clean them.
In my opinion, Mary should choose to wear a pair of glasses instead of contact lenses. In this That way, she can protect her eyes and save money for her parents.

Overall very good, corrections are very minor

[sportydude]

I was about to set an apostrophe into the "its", but then when clicking on the  button, I realized he did put some kind of apostrophe that doesn't show up on my display. Does anyone else have this problem?

[Kingpoleon]

I think agile, active, or energetic makes more sense than athletic, depending upon what you mean. Do you mean she plays sports, do you mean she is fast, do you mean she has a lot of energy? In short: what do you mean by "athletic"?